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Demonstration: Ordering points within sections

Demonstration: Ordering points within sections

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Demonstration: Ordering points within sections

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- [Instructor] Okay, welcome back. And here's my effort to tidy up the points within each section. So we have our lead and the angle there. And we have details of new measures. Now, I think that first point is valid, it can stay. The second one, I'm gonna bring up this one. So-called traffic-light labeling indicates whether the degree of salt, sugar, or fat in food or drink products is high, medium, or low. So straight after the Ministry of Health is saying they're gonna introduce this thing, we're explaining about traffic-light labeling and what it basically does. And then I thought we could mention that... See, I'm looking for it to flow, okay. So after talking about the traffic-light labeling and what it does, we will say that, you know, sugar is gonna be the first one to be introduced. And a similar labeling system for salt or fat in other types of food are to be brought in later. And then we can say here that the measures were outlined by this particular health minister just as a…

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