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Demonstration: Getting rid of repetition

Demonstration: Getting rid of repetition

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Demonstration: Getting rid of repetition

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- [Instructor] Okay, so we're looking at repetition here, and there's one point here which causes me concern, gives me pause for thought, and that's this. Health and Nutrition Minister Dr. Rajitha Senaratne said that from July 31st, soft drink makers will be forced to display on their bottles a color chart. Now for one thing, it repeats most of what's in the first point. The Ministry of Health said it will be mandatory and enforceable from the beginning of August to display color codes according to the sugar content percentage. But it also has one detail that isn't in the first point that we may need in the story, and that is the name of the minister. So we wanna see whether we want somehow to keep that detail in while fixing the repetition. We also have the problem that the date, July 31st, doesn't exactly square up with the first point, which talks about the beginning of August is when these measures come in. But we're not gonna deal with that yet, because our focus is on…

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